Then
a funny thing happened. I started to
like the poem. It expressed how I feel
right now. Overwhelmed. It included the little pep talk I give myself
at times like this. I told myself that I was taking care of the problems.
Second
stanza is me telling myself—who are you kidding?
Third
stanza, especially after I changed out one of the lines, is about me restating
the problem. I thought using inversion
on the first line to turn it into the second line was just a cheap trick. But when I read the poem at my poetry seminar
today, everyone liked that line the best.
The instructor said it was not just a trick because the inversion added
to the meaning of the poem
The
fourth stanza, only one line long, with just a little bit of tweaking, resolves
the poem with a happy ending.
You
can see the two versions of the poem below.
I
called the poem Horos because the rules for news print poetry say that the
title must come from the headline. Dumb
title! No, not so much. “Horos” means dance in Greek, and dance is an
apt name for this poem. The poem is
about the dance I do with my emotions when I am feeling overwhelmed.
I
liked the poem because beginning each line with an “ing’ verb, reminded me of
waves coming again and again and again. (It also provided rhyme.) And the short spare sentences suggest
weariness, problem piled upon problem.
And
last but not least I found the most wonderful picture to go with the poem. (See it below.) a little sailboat all alone on a big ocean
trying to make it home amidst the roiling waves. The waves aren’t that high, but just high enough
so it is not smooth sailing. It's the little sailboat that could.
This painting of a sailboat is from Laurie Justus Pace. |
Horos (News Print Poem) Horos (Revised)
Feeling
overwhelmed right now. Feeling
overwhelmed right now.
Chipping
away at the problem. Chipping
away at the problem.Clearing the slate. Clearing the slate.
Walking
the walk … Walking
the walk …
or just talking the talk? or just talking the talk?
Trying
to do too much. Trying
to do too much.
Going
beyond the call of duty. Doing
too much trying.Seeking a conclusion. Seeking a conclusion.
The rest of the way is smooth sailing. Hoping for smooth sailing.
So,
now I have explained my poem. If I have
to explain the poem, it is not a good poem.
But you guys got the poem without the need for explanation, right?
Also, I know a lot of people feel overwhelmed around the holidays. Overwhelmed with too many things to do; overwhelmed with emotions. So I hope my little poem helps you out with that.
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